Lies and Truth

• Artist: Kit Kat Cute
• Description: i wrote this during the time when i am supposed to be doing schoolwork and yet this is what came up off of my mindless doodlings and reflection. i just vented out my frustrations and here is the end result of that
• Date: 07/31/2008
• Tags: lies truth

somehow i felt like drowning
beyond the sea of emotions overswept me
overcoming the sanity
overcoming the pain
overcoming my life

as tangled as the strands of hair
dark is what defines gravity
what pulls myself to an endless void
towards a deceitful facade
a facade you fabricated

what meaning does it lies behind?
what means do you plan to hide?
when will inveracity cease to exist
when will i know of the truth amidst
the overgrowing conflict, lunacy!

falsely believing you are what you are
faith that there is more to what there is
thought i knew you, thought i do
underneath it all, just a scheme devised
a game played by the wicked mind

beguiled by your aureate talk
cutting the link of the silver chain
the trust you asked, the trust you gained
i gladly gave and yet you yourself
had break away, never looking back

what you are, what you did
put myself total control over empathy
you initiating the first footstep
and a dozen more to be further followed
i need to take, a step at a time

devotion shattered, a loveless affection
the clearing of a cloudy sky in sight
realizations dawning as temptations grew afar
the foolish mind that used to dominate
has fallen as i begin to vidicate

everything is with a truth
as i hung on to faith, to and fro
discerning fallacy from reality
you give me lies, and ill give you truth
back to where it should be, supposed to be

Comments

[Lovers Never Tell]

Where it's good the vocab losses it's meaning, and where it's bad is riddled with cliche. You repeat yourseld too much, and it gets tiring reading stuff like:
"It should be, suppose to be..."
"What you are, what you did..."
"... the trust you asked, the trust you gained..."

And also, you need to use grammar and capatalize your stuff! Write it out like prose and then put in all the line breaks n stuff. It reads better and clearer when written that way.