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verse I: I am sad, I am lame
I am nothing but ashamed.
Now the world is closing in
and I feel so discontent!
chorus: But you found me when,
my heart couldn't bleed,
oh why can't I be free by
these damn chains the world
left around me!
verse II: You sometimes make me wonder
who I am. Am a punk, an emo,
or goth, or I am just lost that I forgot
that I am nothing but a ghost.
chorus: But you found me when,
my heart couldn't bleed,
oh why can't I be free by
these damn chains the world
left around me!
verse III: I feel this heavy burden when
I am with you, it makes me
feel good, that you care so much,
but I really don't understand I love you!
chorus: But you found me when,
my heart couldn't bleed,
oh why can't I be free by
these damn chains the world
left around me!
verse IV: Sometimes the world is way to
suffocating, I can't even stand it, but
when your with me my heart feels so free,
that I can finally breathe! (repeat chorus 3x)
- by cupcake_ninja08 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/09/2008 |
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- Title: Suffocation!
- Artist: cupcake_ninja08
- Description: Okay I know my last post was a little harsh, and I am sorry. I was just in a bad mood, and can you blame me for it. Anyways I wrote this song after reading a manga, and its a love song, although I am a girl; I wrote this with the intention of a male singer singing it. I hope you all like and if you don't then that is that, just rate and comment plz! Thank you!
- Date: 08/09/2008
- Tags: suffocation heart love
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Comments (5 Comments)
- cupcake_ninja08 - 12/14/2008
- well yeah it would sound better sung than wrote, but I can't sing it on her, plus I don't won't to, but to be honest I wrote this song for a male to sing, so I was kinda writing like one, it probably didn't come out to well, but thanks for at least commenting!
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- Agrikar the Hidden - 12/13/2008
- I dunno. It's alright, but it seems hard to flow and at points it seems like you tried to rhyme something and didn't, so the flow seems interrupted not only by that but the chorus seems to break it up in an unorthodox manner, but perhaps this would be better sung instead of wrote?
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- cupcake_ninja08 - 12/13/2008
- well thanks for the comment, I do appreciate it! It just sucks when no one gives your work a chance!
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- -Kingdom of Nothingness- - 12/13/2008
- I'm reading it. I know how it feels for nobody to read your stuff. 5/5
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- cupcake_ninja08 - 09/10/2008
- I try to be creative, but how can I when no one is willing to read my stuff, sorry if I offend anyone, but i speak the truth!
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