I am Scared

• Artist: Childishly Mature
• Description: this is somthing i wrote last year, i forgot what its called.......apparently your supposed to repeat the first line at the end of every stanza............... huh........anyway i just MIRACULOUSLY found it......so
• Date: 10/21/2008
• Tags: scared

I am scared
I wonder if it will stop
I hear a chorus of screams
I see fallen bodies around me
I want to leave this place
I am scared


I pretend to be ok
I feel the pain
I run my hands over my scars
I believe I will die
I cry my heart out
I am scared


I understand that it wont end
I say we'll never make it
I dream of Freedom
I struggle to escape
I hope I survive
I am Scared

Comments

[Kurokawa Haru]

5/5 for the structure and the emotion in it smile it's great

[XallXaloneXbrokenX]

I think you should add to it.
To me, its like a outline of a poem-to-be. It could defently go somewhere.
Please check out my latest poem/song?
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http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=101894581#title

[The God Bot 4000]

Uhm... This is alright. It doesn't sound all that poetic in my opinion though. It has no rhythm. But it's still creates decent imagery. 3/5
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