- I am waiting for my secert love as she packs her life in a suitcase.I look up at the sky watching the stars shine,I laugh to myself for this deed i have done.i am on the run ,I am talking her away for the monster in her house which should have been her haven not her hell.I grin as I watch her walk down the porch stairs.She looks at me with a surprise look.I but i asumed it was because what we are doing.I tell her everything is ok when i hear a muffled sound then for some reason i got ice cold fast.but i was more worryed why she looked so horrified.i look at her then i look down i can see the blood leaking from a hole in my chest.I turn around to see the monster standing behind me with a gun that was smoking.I yelled to her to run but he started after her, I jump to stop him but i fell to the ground but i caught his pants leg.I held on to his leg as long as i could but he stood up and pointed the gun at my head and asked if i felt the cold grasp of death then i saw the flash from the gun and i heared a scream and close my eyes.......
- by Hollowhero246 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/31/2008 |
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- Title: run away love
- Artist: Hollowhero246
- Description: it sadly romantic but has some what a happy ending ales i think so.
- Date: 10/31/2008
- Tags: away love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- darknessangel101276 - 01/30/2009
- can u check out mine plz its called darkness within me
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- mini_kitty14 - 11/09/2008
- its as if the words u speak are the words that come from an angle whos wings are dipped in the blackness of sorrow.
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- BumbleBeeSex_ - 11/04/2008
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I liked the ideas you had and the great writing...but your spelling was a little off as well as your grammar. There is no poetic form for this but ya know, even if it confused me a little it was great and something I would love to read more of.
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- -chino- x3x - 11/04/2008
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ouch bro ... that is just sad ...he died ...then what happen to d lady?
is this story supposed to be continued? lol..but it was a great poem ..
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- Foxvampire_Sapphire - 11/04/2008
- Aw this one made me cry, I have been in a situation just like this one lucky no one really got shot but someone almost did. Great job keep it up.
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- Hollowhero246 - 11/03/2008
- thank you guys for the vote and comments.
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- tksunshine93 - 11/01/2008
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how very bittersweet....
and yes romantic in a sad way, but then again, isn't romance usually tinged with some sadness? very good - Report As Spam