Outlooks

• Artist: AngeI Flonne
• Description: Okays , here is a poem I wrote on my free time. I just started writing poems recently. This poem is about the outlooks people can have on life. Whether it be positive , neutral or negative. Try not to be too harsh or criticize. I hope you like it >.< (NOTE : laxation is actually a word and that is how it's spelled yet my spell check says other wise o.O)
• Date: 12/08/2008
• Tags: outlooks positivity neutrality negativity

~ There are three outlooks on life

Please look at the bright side
Of course the options are wide
Sure glad that you can stay
It is such a beautiful day
Trust me , it will be fine
I'm certain there will be a sign
Victory sure to come
It will grant a very large sum
Try your best. You'll succeed
You are up to the test. You'll lead

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Normal and somewhat confined
Equality is my dream
Uncommitted , unaligned
Try to avoid either team
Regularly uninvolved
Aloof , by standing and calm
Let's hope things will be resolved
Inactive and not one qualm
True desolation and lone
Yearn for laxation is shown

-

No , we are all going to die
Everyone should not try
Gainsaying , gloomy , impugning
Act not when they're crooning
Too much hope is sure to bring you down
I'm thinking that you'll frown
Vitality does not last long
Inclined to grasp what's wrong
This life of mine is soon to end
Yer my life could amend

~ Your outlooks change but are rife

Comments

[iFluffy Mrsnuggles]

Thsi is good =]
5/5
oops looks like i already voted sweatdrop yea cuse remember you got kinda sad because i gave you 4/5
>.< goof job

[AngeI Flonne]

Nope , criticism doesn't help me out. I criticize myself and try to perfect things on my own. That's my way...on my own..yup. Well I guess but ppl can look em up in a dictionary too haha

[Angelic Recovery]

criticism does help people get better but, If you just started writing then first you need to learn about poetry before you can take critisizim so yea I guess youre right. Wordy is ok but not words you hafta look up in deicitonarys b/c then people wont know what it was as you didint and it may confuse them.
Furthermore!!! =D lol umm yea totaly you tell me every k? no you tell me!

[AngeI Flonne]

Thx , I will ><

[IRKookies]

i like it vary much hey read meh poem its sucks but still its called Maybe its okay to dream

[AngeI Flonne]

Back on top of teh list baby ;3 It will be down soon enough D= Oh wells..