Flame in ones Eyes

• Artist: Mystic Warrior Tamashii
• Description: A poem on the darkness a desire can breed
• Date: 12/16/2008
• Tags: flame ones eyes

The waking step Echo the tides of fate they beckon the worship the pity and soles of ones heart the flames of passion and lust and the light of true tender love Battle each to consume one in the Rage of Emotion the battle ending with the succumbing to temptation dirty and foul to shatter the heart of the love

Comments

[Gylfie531]

umm... i would have put some punctuation or entered down or something to break this up. all run together it sounds really bad, without flow. it doesn't move properly without some natural pauses. still a good concept and a good intreptretation of said concept. 4/5.

[Hotori Kitsunekurou]

very good as usual 5 stars