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I keep a secret, deep inside
Where no one goes and no one dies
This little place I call “my own”
Where I can be myself and be alone
Within the chambers of my soul
Where I will never hear so bold,
No man to fear, to see her eyes
No hope to show, no outward lies
The only key I hold within, is deep inside
Where no one knows and no more lies
Where no one goes and no one cries
The only place I can abide is where
The dark deep inside lays…inside of me
- by WillowWays2 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/16/2008 |
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- Title: the dark inside me
- Artist: WillowWays2
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Description:
i have been told that this poem is alot like life. i wrote it while i was up in alaska.
For more of my poems please vists:
Poeticallyincorrect.webs.com - Date: 12/16/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Give Me A Hint - 06/29/2009
- The passion inside this poem is truly strong but the wording could be a little different other then that it is a epic story of life itself
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- Insanitys Playmate - 06/01/2009
- Hm...I agree with Beancup (hope its ok to call him that). That line doesn't quite fit where it is. It disturbs the flow. Grammar too. Oh. I have to ask: why use commas, but no other punctuation? The ellipsis at the end is really unnecessary. The last line is also awkward. "...Inside lies inside..."? Other than that, its really good. I love the emotion.
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- B-B-B-BeanCup - 12/17/2008
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"The only key I hold within, is deep inside" is incredibly awkward with the rest of the poem around it. I was actually a little into it before that.
Also, something lies inside you, it doesn't lays inside you. - Report As Spam
- Akirekira - 12/17/2008
- oh, so beautifull, I love the writing, so nice^-^ 5/5
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