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• Artist: ADSOC
• Description:
• Date: 01/15/2009
• Tags: untitled

I can't get you out of my system
It feels too damn good
I want to stop
But I don't know if I should

You are my drug,
My stimulent
Who needs needles
When I can get a hug

You are my high
When I feel low
You help me through it all
You're my kind of guy

The hazy dreams
Are long gone
And love
Well, it's not what it seems

Comments

[Kibroth]

Dangerous request you're making there Red, but I'm game.

1. Remember to ALWAYS spell check your poem before posting (stimulAnt)

2. Read great poems by great poets. Art tends to inspire art. (I.e. Music and sleep dep. seem to work for me...)

3. Practice, practice, practice.

Otherwise, it has form, it has a subject, it's clear, it's honest. It's a good poem.

Find your voice. It's out there somewhere, I promise. wink 3/5

-K

[Sow It Up K i d]

this is great! ^_^

[ADSOC]

I forgot to add....
"How can I make this better?"
thanks for comments!