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The chilling wind and cloudy skies
Intercept the light alike the lies.
I’ll speak the truth with foggy breath;
A weary wish, whispers of death.
The mausoleum and forming rain
Write this day in ill disdain.
Thoughts of today prevent peaceful sleep.
The graves sing to me from six feet deep.
I want this now, I want it all,
I want to watch you as I fall.
Day from dawn, dusk from day,
You spin my world, but my world is grey.
This evening is bitter, so hold me tight.
Tonight we choose to die or fight.
Averted eyes and blood-stained lips
Passionate touch and fingertips;
I’m all yours, and there’s no shame,
But you could never say the same.
At night—these nights—you’re just a dream;
Kiss me, feel me, make me scream.
Skin to skin, face to face,
Eyes set to flutter and hearts to race,
Pulses to pound, and veins to bleed;
Kill me, if you feel the need.
The fog, the moon, the ghostly dance,
You’re real, but this is fake romance.
I love you, but I’m not your only.
Waiting is like being lonely,
But I’ll kindle the flame even if it is small.
Go on living freely, and I’ll be your doll.
You’re an angel, and I’m on strings,
You’re an angel without its wings.
- by The God Bot 4000 |
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- | Submitted on 03/02/2009 |
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- Title: Angel
- Artist: The God Bot 4000
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Description:
One of the strangest poems I've ever written.
Criticize please.
Please try to refrain from just 'nice' or 'cool' or whatever.
Constructive criticism=GOOD. - Date: 03/02/2009
- Tags: angel wings
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Comments (4 Comments)
- pikachu5670 - 05/03/2009
- Woah, this is just great. Ill read this every dau. :3 5/5
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- Menardi Grace - 04/12/2009
- I usually am not into end rhymes, but this is the expection. I could sense the constant beat in each line with only a few pointed interuptions -> "At night-these nights-you're just a dream". It's a very deep in context and this is something I will read over & over again. Excellent work 5/5.
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- A7X cl0wn - 03/14/2009
- its ok i dispise normal poetry i am a horror writer in poetry y arent u u look like u would be an expert
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- Law of Kira - 03/04/2009
- Beautiful and brilliant. Your rhythm and your rhymes are good, no grammar mistakes that I could find either. Excellent job, 5/5.
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