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Today I watched the petals fall,
Just like the rest of it all.
Like you and me,
Just fresh off the tree.
Then I noticed how wrong that was.
Why? Well because,
They're falling in to death.
While were falling be it the best,
Love.
- by Invader xxxx |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/15/2009 |
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- Title: Falling.
- Artist: Invader xxxx
- Description: So this is after I read "The raven." And looking out my window. Oh and the ending is kinda lame what do you recmend oh gaians?
- Date: 07/15/2009
- Tags: love
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Senpai Darling - 08/01/2009
- The second line from the bottom sounds a little forced. But other than that it's good.
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- ElectraShocked - 07/20/2009
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While we're falling be it the best.
And it shall be our love's only test.
Just a suggestion smile
Take out the "Love" at the end...it's kind of cheesy wink - Report As Spam
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