Pushing Me

• Artist: Hakuo The White Phoenix
• Description: Other peoples effect on my life and what i think of it.
• Date: 07/22/2009
• Tags: pushing

You push me down
You say I'm no good
You say I'm not being what I could
But you're just pushing blindly
Trying to live through me
But I won't change
I'll stay deranged
I like being different
It suits me fine
I like being weird
Its just my state of mind
This is how I live
So I won't give in
To your demands
And I know that you won't help
So just stay out
And stop with your commands
You have to stop with your insults
Even if you don't care
They'll always hurt
Cause they're an echo of despair
They won't kill me off
But they'll hurt inside
They won't change who I am
But they might change my mind
About how I judge the world
Should I b***h and complain
Or give them what they deserve
Only destruction and hate
But try to push me down
As far as I can stand
Do as many things as you can
Try to push me down
I will come back
I won't stay broken I can promise that.

Comments

[Hakuo The White Phoenix]

If I thought I could express myself better in paragraph than you probably wouldn't be criticizing my work. And on top of that it is a song I do very little poetry.

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

All in all... I think this coulda been put in paragraph form and still come across as strongly as you intended.

My fave part:
They won't change who I am
But they might change my mind

I can't say that I liked this poem very much but those two lines struck me. For that, you get a 3. 3nodding