Dice

• Artist: Kazn Mbyzzwyb
• Description: a song about falling in someone who is just playing with your heart
• Date: 07/26/2009
• Tags: dice

Is love just a game
You play too pass time?
You said you felt the same
But I see I was blind
I’ll no longer be played
Like the fool that I was
I wish you’d stay away
From me, because
I’m not your dice
I won’t be played like a fool
I will no longer be nice
I won’t be your tool
Yeah, yeah
I hate being your pawn
In this game of love
I love it that you’re gone
Cause you’re not the gift from above
That I thought you were
And now you’ve gotten what you deserve
I’ll no longer be played
Like the fool that I was
I wish you’d stay away
From me, because
I’m not your dice
I won’t be played like a fool
I will no longer be nice
I won’t be your tool
Yeah, yeah
You can’t control me
By rolling
The dice that is my heart
We can’t redo this, we can’t restart
I’ll no longer be played
Like the fool that I was
I wish you’d stay away
From me, because
I’m not your dice
I won’t be played like a fool
I will no longer be nice
I won’t be your tool
Yeah
Yeah…

Comments

[l-Phagnomenal-l]

this is really good

[musicworldgirl486]

I love it!!! biggrin biggrin biggrin biggrin

[Purple-shoes616]

[it wouldnt let me plst the whole thing]
i would reccomend that you tinker with the formatting to make the chorus stand out from the rest

[Purple-shoes616]

you did a good job staying in format (which is a skill so many poetry writers seem to lack; and thats ok, but its refreshing to see one that does)
and the repitition was a good addition to the piece
my criticisms would be that some of it seems a little awkward and disjointed,
and you need to make it clear that you're using repititon purposfully; I got it eventually but not until half way through the piece