One Last Shot at Love

• Artist: Kunoburedeji
• Description: I know love being a game has been done before so you don't have to say it!
• Date: 07/27/2009
• Tags: painful game love hurt pain

Love is just a game,
That always ends in pain,
Always ends in tears,
No matter how many years,
I try to make it last,
It just end up,
As a painful part of the past.

Love is just a game,
That always ends in pain,
Always ends in heartache,
Always seems like a mistake,
I know it's true,
I'll end up blue,
Yet I'm still willing,
To give the game of love,
One last shot.

Comments

[Maune]

All your writes are beautiful Kuno I feel each one of the writeings you have done close to my heart and this one is also the same a 5/5

[Kunoburedeji]

Thank you and I like that idea. I love getting feedback like that, it helps me better my writing^-^

[ElectraShocked]

Good! But...I don't know...It feels like its missing something...maybe what Valenttinious sugested would correct that...? It just seems a little hollow. But it still deserves a 4/5.

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[Valentinious]

i like it! i don't agree with the content, but the fluency and rhymes are very superb! although, one thing i might do different, in the 3rd to last line, "yet I'm still willing" i would add in, "to give all i've got" or something such as that, because it ties in "one last shot" better, but over all a very good poem smile