The Girl who Died ...

• Artist: dooffy360
• Description: okay =)
  i posted this one on before on my other account vanessa_m but forgot my password. So im transferring my poems to this account =)
  Well whats can i say about this one =/ lets .......... well i wasn't happy when i wrote this ^-^
• Date: 06/18/2010
• Tags: girl died suicide

I walk to my room and lock the door.
My legs give out and i fall to the floor.
I start to cry, alittle too loud.
And then I hear a knocking sound.

Before they can talk, I blast my CD.
Thinking to myself, I can finally be free.
I start to remember the good times i had.
and wondered, when did my life become so sad.

Why was my life no longer fun?
I reached under my bed and grabbed my gun.
Without even thinking i put it to my head.
Pulled the trigger, and this girl was dead.

Comments

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I really like the rhyme and rhythm you have going. The subject may be a bit grim. But this poem is very well composed in my opinion. You avoid a lot of the mistakes that other people make.