-
When i hear your name, It makes me go insane
It touches my soul , And it makes me lose control
Your my shooting star, You keep me wishing from afar
Forever and a day , My heart is where you'll stay
If you should ever leave, I would be crushed beyond belief
I just need you to be around, To hold me without a sound
Ill say it again and again, Please be with me til the end
With you i dont need money, Ill keep running and running
Tell me what i need to do, Because to you i shall stay true
You fit perfectly in my arms, Ill protect you from any harm
But when i want to cry , You lift me up and help me fly
When im lost and confused, Your always there to get me through
When im frusterated and angry, Your voice sooths and calms me
Baby when i hear your name, I pray that things will never change
Comments (5 Comments)
- LoudmouthedTasi - 11/18/2012
-
The little spelling/capitalization/grammar errors are hurting my enjoyment of this piece on a professional level. Reread carefully in the future.
The poem structure reads like a raving prose than a cohesive piece of poetry.
Despite all this, I can tell you really feel strongly about this poem. I'm sure she'll read your best intentions in this poem.
2/5. I'm a very harsh critic, so don't let that dissuade you. Keep writing, 'cause I give you an 5/5 for effort. - Report As Spam
- Joe Pipes - 07/09/2010
- thank you everyone!! (: ill keep trying my best!
- Report As Spam
- xXHarunaXx - 07/09/2010
- This is so sweet, I really love it =D It's really amazing!
- Report As Spam
- emo_kitten13 - 07/09/2010
-
thanks for commenting mine ^^
your poems are really good. they're so sweet ^^ - Report As Spam
- Nailli - 07/09/2010
- Man it was sooooooooo sweett!! ur a real sweat heart! It was good i liked it ^w^ Good job!! Please keep writeing!!
- Report As Spam
- |
- |
-
Submit
