Nonsence in the Dark nights

• Artist: Kyss Kyss
• Description: ....... don't ask
• Date: 10/19/2010
• Tags: nonsence dark nights

i can count
how many times i've cried
but still you denie
all you've done
in your defense you say it's me
all my fault
And despite the last time
your hatered grew

If you hate me i don't wanna know
if you rather run away don't tell me
if you tell me i might chase you down
make you fall through the cracks
misunderstand all i say
it doesn't matter anyway

Crying does nothing new
cause more greif then fluffy pillows do
Clouds seem like candy sitting high
they turn gray really quickly over the day
The crismon liquid that burns through my veins
Prove that one spill will stain

Non sence in the dark nights
as the parchement rolls into the dark
Claimed by the sun,the moon
into a life of lies
no more truth Spills out through my toungue
Living like they never really cared who's around
Don't push me upside down
ill fight till the end
Even if it means
i die alone ill win in the end
They will understand
Why i cry
i hate
i don't care
and most of all why i find trust a hard gift to give

Comments

[Kyss Kyss]

One idk what SAT is because we don't have that here
and two its randomness at its best =P

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

For starters, you spelled "Deny" wrong.
It's not a bad poem, but it needs work. Try using some more complex line structures and more elaborate metaphors. Maybe break out an SAT word or two, ya know?
For now, I'll give it a 3/5, but with much room for improvement.
I hope you'll check out my works. Judging from the feel of this poem, I think you'd like my poem "The Lands We Loved In"