Your Love is Poison

• Artist: typicalsarah
• Description: I was gonna enter this in a contest, but I didn't have the money. I sold something and had just enough money to do this, but now I am broke. If you like this, please send me something, or offer a trade so I can keep writing!
• Date: 09/24/2011
• Tags: your love poison

.Your love is poison, but kill me anyways.
Some people think love is hell,
but you are my dream.
I hope you agree, but not that you'll die for me.
As you see, I am giving my life for you,
Your love is poison.

Now I ain't no Juliet,
and you ain't no Romeo,
but we would do anything for eachother.
People are people, and your beyond that.
Your my everyday wish, your my air to breathe.
Your love is poison.

I've been a'waitin for you for you to kiss me,
but now it is my time to end,
forever.
The feeling on my lips,
but the pain on by back as I fall.
Your love is poison.

As my soul rises and my body goes down,
I start to grow my wings.
And this very day,
I watch you from above,
Until you come join me.
Your love is my dream

Comments

[dragonisia]

ok of urs this one is my fav

[in a pinto forever]

You're a natural poet. Grade-A cool beans, brostaff. That said, work a bit on the grammar/spelling. I know, nitpicking.
One more thing. If you want to really improve the quality of your work, try to experiment a bit with diction. You don't need to, and anyways the way you are right now leaves your work accessible to a wider audience, but it's just something to think about, y'know? Aight, broladdin. Peace.

[killerbee 74]

Well I like it! Please continue to make others!

[xshattersilence]

loved it heart