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Henrietta's notebook.
I shall post whatever I see fit to post, whether it be snippets of wisdom, self-authored stories, or just random tidbits of pointless information.
My story, sixth installment.
The branches tore at Henrietta, and she visualized them as the foul hands of They who sought to stop her. She tore free once again, bearing one more scratch in addition to all the ones she'd already earned, but ignored the stinging sensation. She had to run. She could feel Their presence at her heels, nipping playfully at her as she ran, tugging at her shadow with every step. She tried to move faster, and dodged a particularly large oak tree, some leaves falling to the ground as she moved some of the lower branches.
Ahead of her, she could see the end of the forest. The trees were getting sparser, and the ground seemed cleaner, less littered by fallen twigs and leaves. She focused on the horizon, and ran on, needing to reach it as soon as she could. Finally, she stepped free of the last outstretched branch, only to throw her foot into empty space. Pulling back violently, she just barely managed to avoid tumbling headlong down the cliff that was the cause of the forest's end. Standing on it's edge, she looked down, fighting a wave of vertigo as she stared down the hundreds of feet, to look at the craggy, rock festooned bottom, where waves crashed against the base like a living thing, splashing and roaring.
She moved her feet nervously, wanting to run, but unable to. Knowing she couldn't turn around, she looked back and forth, weighing her options. Them, or fall into the water and drown? Either choice was a poor one, and she could think of no others. She could feel Them approaching, possibly moving faster, or maybe she just thought that since she was standing still.






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Fantasy_Magick777
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commentCommented on: Tue Oct 04, 2005 @ 02:22am
eek surprised cliffhanger! whee I cant wait till the 7th chapter! seriously... you can tell the next chapter is going to be awesome. Maybe even a huge fight scene in which They go plunging over the cliffs. 3nodding That'd be nice. 3nodding um... seriously though, throughout this whole story I've tried to guess your next move, or the next twist in the plot, and I'm always left wrong and eager for more to read. I'm telling the truth here Rye, you're probably one of the best writers I've ever read. usually, when you read a story, you can guess whats going to happen next. with this Story, every guess of mine, so far, has been turned to dust. Keep on writing. 3nodding


commentCommented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 10:12am
I like the unique flow and direction of this story that the forest and cliff bring.

Nitpicks: Branches again... First paragraph was a bit redundant =/
Nice intro of the forest though. A bit startling that suddenly there is a hundred foot cliff, would think would see something over its horizon much earlier. Maybe if intro'd the cliff earlier, start a paragraph with it instead of making it the very end of a sentence. "Weighing" her options doesn't have the desparate ring to it. "a poor one" =/



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