What i know

• Artist: Forgiven12
• Description: A poem i wrote and read in a poetry night at a coffe shop. Its a poem about me... and what is true...
• Date: 07/28/2008
• Tags: know

What I Know
This is what I know
I know I am from faith
I know I should be dead
I know who brought me back
I know who is ahead

This I what I know
I know I am a girl of faith in what is rarely ever seen
I know I have a savior who will always be there for me
I know I will always have everything I will ever need
I know I will be safe from everything that could ever harm me

This is what I know
I know I have a living God, a god who never changes
I know I live a life of hope, a hope that shall never fade
I know I have a choice to make, a choice on how to live
I know I live in an imperfect world, but a world that is forever changing

This I what I know is TRUE
Truth is always hidden, but always in plain sight
Truth is always true, no matter how bad it hurts
Truth is rarely ever painless, even if it’s out of love

Comments

[Luna Deslumbrado]

you lost the rythm. still gd

[Miss Fro]

It feels very basic and plain. The repetition is nice, but you need some spice in the non-repeated parts. The word choice could be a little more colorful.

The "This is what I know." feels as if it should be at the end of the stanzas. "This is what I know is true", should be the last line as it resonates powerfully then. There's not need to capitalize true, that makes you seem more novice.

Nice job, it just needs some touching up =)