Angels Beat

• Artist: xxChEcKeRdFrEaKxx
• Description: this is just a little song i wrote. its not entirly done yet but yeah herres part of it. i wish i can give you the beat ummmmmmmmmmmmmm hmmm what does the beat seem like...
  oh ya um try the beat of
  touchdown turn around by hellogoodbye
  mayb thatll work
  its a very techno, and up beat song so ya
• Date: 09/16/2008
• Tags: angels

Angels Beat

we're so far but so close
i am here and you are there
angel angel
hear me out
promise you will never ever
ever ever forget me
cause if you do ill smack you, swear
youll never ever leave me
i love you and you love me
we are in harmony
come come turn around
back up there jump right here
shake it up and twist it down
beatbox me all around
have it your way
have it my way
rock this party
rock this club
dance dance all night long
angel angel hear me out
promise me youll stay tonight
we'll have so much fun!

Comments

[Rynn Calais]

Doesn't match the beat of Touchdown Turnaround at all.
And, um,
"promise you will never ever
ever ever forget me
cause if you do ill smack you"

Because threatening physical abuse really belongs in the lyrics of an upbeat, poppy love song.

[psyche_da_mike]

yeah, but wouldn't that be like a chorus or something? nice job! 5/5

[figuresk8r34]

I like it but juts one suggestion. Try moving the same words to the same line like
angel angel
ever ever ever.
It might flow a bit better and the word breaks might be a bit better as well.