Bound by Imperfection

• Artist: Theia07
• Description: This poem reflects the inner life of a woman who carries the expectations of reliability despite her physical limitations, emotional turbulence, and colorblindness. It paints a portrait of vulnerability transformed into quiet resilience, with sketching as her refuge ,a place where strength and beauty emerge from fragility.
• Date: 11/18/2024
• Tags: bound imperfection

The weight of trust rests upon me,
A delicate thread spun from fragility.
My hands tremble, my vision fades,
Yet I move forward through shifting shades.

Colors elude my searching eyes,
A muted world where truth lies.
Emotions churn like untamed seas,
But lines and forms bring quiet peace.

A pencil glides, my silent reprieve,
Creating worlds where I believe.
In every curve, in every line,
I reclaim a strength that feels divine.

The world demands a steady hand,
Yet my stance is built on shifting sand.
Still, in imperfection, I discover grace-
A fleeting stillness, a sacred space.

Though I am fragile, I endure,
Through art, I heal, through flaws, I'm sure.
Each sketch a whisper, soft, profound,
A quiet triumph, unbound.

-Corazon Pintados

Comments

[Theia07]

Thank you so much for the thoughtful feedback~ I’m glad the phosphene mention stood out to you~it’s one of my favorite parts too. I’ll definitely take your notes on the pronouns, metaphors, and imagery into account as I refine my style. Your encouragement means a lot, and I’ll keep working to improve. Thanks again for reading~<3

[FOE Brett]

Pretty powerful stuff. Deeply evocative and sensorial.

A lot of pronouns; "I," "my." Mix metaphors, inconsistent imagery, and a rigid rhyme scheme keep it from hitting technical highs to match the subject matter.

I especially like the the phosphene mention, though. A real highlight for me. Solid poem. I hope you keep writing!

[Muruki]

People on gaia not appreciating writings. sad