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Remember Me
In the deep beneath the eyes off the gleaming brown
A flow of browny black straight hair.
With a feeling of ignorance on a straight face.
The face on her is like a poker player.
She wouldn't dare to smile,
She likes the violent, fun and gloomy games,
The computer room is her haven.
Her most delicious sweet tasty dessert is the custard tarts which came from the flower of the sun,
Her attitude is a kind of a annoyed yankee tomboy
Who hates dealing with giggling girly girls in fights .
Her voice is quiet like a gentle breeze of wind,
Her mind is covered in happiness and darkness when ever she looks and stares at anything,
Her true-mini-dream self is in a maze full of surprises.
Her taste in music has been expanded from the most exciting japanese English songs,
Her Taste in Movies doesnt make her a normal girl at all she likes an mix of movies combined together.
Her worst nightmare is at school in the name of Remuera Intermediate with strict lines and worst teachers,
Her normal self has changed over the pass few years of school years,
But it will end sooner or later
Her name stay hiding in the names of the door panels in the maze
- by I P O C K Y x A R I S A |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/19/2008 |
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- Title: Remember Me
- Artist: I P O C K Y x A R I S A
- Description: I started doing this Poem at my school cause i was so bored Well here it is
- Date: 09/19/2008
- Tags: rememberme
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Comments (5 Comments)
- villaabe - 09/19/2008
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Awsome story conveyed in the poem
1. needs to flow better
2. "poker player" is to many syllables use something with less
3. make "dare to smile" to "dare smile" ...flows better
4. you use to many words in stanzas 4-end, use less words to convey idea and that would work much better
5. lastly, i know its up to the author, but it would sound better if it rhymed - Report As Spam
- Luv-Ink - 09/19/2008
- It was good, I like it.
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- waIlflower - 09/19/2008
- 2nd - biggrin Awesome, did you write this? owo 5/5
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- AsSeenOnTVXXX - 09/19/2008
- nice and creative :3
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- K i t t y -S p- - 09/19/2008
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first one! again!
love it =D - Report As Spam