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Twiddledee, twiddledum
You're the one that makes me run
Terrididdle, terrilye
You're the one that makes me cry
Humpty dumpty sat on a wall
But in fact he did not fall
He jumped from the chains instead
So he would wind up dead
Ring around the roseys
A pocket full of poseys
The panic spread around is
To fear riger mortis.
Jack be nimble, Jack be quick
Jack be beat to death with a stick
When Little Boy Blue blew on his horn
He brought angels of death, filled with scorn.
Just when you thought this fairtytale was through
The cat and the fiddle came in and slew
"Hey, Diddlediddle," he cride out to the rest
Then he lept forward and stabbed him in the breast
So rock a by baby, until the cradle stops
Stay hidden up there in the tree tops
Run away from the beast of nightmare
But never forget, he will always be there.
- by Kyru Windwaker |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/24/2008 |
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- Title: Fairytale from Hell
- Artist: Kyru Windwaker
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Description:
I know the title sounds a little cliche' but this is the first poem that my friends actually responded well to, but I want someones opinion who DOESN'T know me because those tend to be more truthful. Just be easy please. >.< I don't do poetry often.
PLEASE comment I want to know your thoughts. >.<
- Date: 09/24/2008
- Tags: fairytale from hell
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Comments (7 Comments)
- angel of fortune - 06/13/2009
- Man i liked it heaps =]
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- Kyru Windwaker - 10/02/2008
- I made an executive decision and booted the Little Bow Peep line. I didn't like it very much.
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- Kyru Windwaker - 09/28/2008
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Thank you guys so much. And about the rhyming, like I said I'm not a poet and I tried, but after a while I went blank. I'm sorry I posted the first draft up, I should have went over it and changed it around a bit and all of that.
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- WEwhoEATtheNIGHT - 09/27/2008
- this poem was ok but it was a little choppy and it started out rhyming but then you kind of lost the rhyme and its rhythm.
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- Heart of Blades - 09/27/2008
- That's a great poem, nicly worded and I've always been a fan of the dark fairytail stuff
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- SweetInsanityxx - 09/27/2008
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I LOVE IT. Absolutely amazing!
I love you. razz and the poem. - Report As Spam
- Marshmlow1 - 09/27/2008
- I know not all poems are suppose to ryme, but it seems as if you were trying to make it ryme, and you didn't do that well with the ryming.
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