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Your life is a mess,
A terrible wreck.
Your history kills you,
Like a break of the neck.
Outside you look fine,
But inside you're bleeding.
Your thoughts are tormenting,
Your hearts barely beating.
Try to fix your problems,
But all attempts are no good.
Why can't they just stop,
And end like they should?
But you know that won't happen,
That's not how life works.
You must suffer the problems
No matter how much it hurts.
So just sit and be lonely,
And cry yourself to sleep.
Eventually this will end,
And no longer you'll weep.
But until that time comes,
Just let the tears flow.
And wander off endlessly
'Till there is nowhere to go.
- Title: Something To Pass The Time
- Artist: Napgasm
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Description:
A little poem I wrote during Chemisty.
It sucks, but I just felt like submitting something. - Date: 10/14/2008
- Tags: something pass time
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Comments (4 Comments)
- rebelliousOracle - 10/14/2008
- Oooh I love it!
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- Alfonse-Maldrant - 10/14/2008
- Adding this in the interest of fairness I do see a rhythm If you read it through, and pay attention to the ammount of syllables and such, it has a flow I didn't get caught once but maybe that's just me.
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- Alfonse-Maldrant - 10/14/2008
- OMG this is so deep and awesome. I love it!!!
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- Queen Hexagon - 10/14/2008
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it needs rythmn..i dont even know if i spelled that right.. the words are good but u just need to make it flow. like on the second stanza "Outside you look fine,
But inside you're bleeding.
Your thoughts are tormenting,
Your hearts barely beating."
it would flow more if you said "your heart is barely beating"
i made a poem that i thought was well flowing. it would make me happy if u read it ^^ please? comment?
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