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i point away the blade of my knife
and try to pass this test u call my life
i throw away the things that have made my life hard
all of these drugs have left me permanently scarred
you say you'll be there even though you wont
you say you love me even though you don't
i don't understand these f***ed up lies
of why you say you love me but f**k other guys
so i take the blade and point at my heart
will you take it away or watch it tear me apart
only you can stop the hell that is my life
all you have to do is take away the knife...
- Title: my life is yours...
- Artist: ochonixal
- Description: a poem i wrote back in my emo days
- Date: 11/22/2008
- Tags: life dark poem
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Klaora - 02/15/2009
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This could be very nice. It has very good rhythm and rhyming. However...capitalization and punctuation are very good tools to use. Chatspeak has no place in poetry, so fix up that one place where you put 'u' instead of 'you'.
Fix it up, polish it, and you have a very nice piece of art here. - Report As Spam
- leforaumi - 11/23/2008
- aw cute and sad. D:
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