Let Me Bleed.

• Artist: hey girl hey XD
• Description: ugh...i don't know. i'm mad at my bf.
• Date: 12/09/2008
• Tags: bleed stab

stab my heart out, let me bleed.
you're all i want, you're all i need.
why did you dissappear and leave me alone?
i was waiting for you and you didn't come.
pierce a dagger through my skin,
through my soul, and out again.
you said you would always be there, but you weren't.
you don't know the pain i feel, the regret, the hurt.
push a knife right through my heart.
i can't stand when we are apart.
but you don't care, don't understand.
you held my heart, when you took my hand.
you stole my heart, tried to sew it together,
tried to mend it, but it didn't get better.
so gently place it back into my chest,
you ruined my heart, my life is a mess.

Comments

[_Roooose_]

WOW, you lot are so tough!
I realise that it might need some work, but over all it displays alot of emotion. Sure, its repetitive, but alot of the greatest poems are repeated, and yet they are all different in some way. Its a good poem, so il rate it a 4 :]

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Repetitive garbage! "aren't the best" You are too kind, previous comment! I am thoroughly unimpressed. 1/5!

[Adderall Sleep]

That's pretty emo.
The grammar is a bit tragic, sentence structure and word choice aren't the best.
It could definitely use some work.
But the writing itself has potential.
2/5.

[briama13]

damn!! that was deep 5/5

[iiLil_emo_PuppeTii]

this is good.... keep writing!
5/5!