inferior existence

• Artist: Candii_Courtney
• Description: When insperation comes, i always take it.
  
  I love the 4 seasons and the elemants and this poem came to me when i was half asleep at 12:00 -_____- then i finshed it at school. :D comment if you vote please :D comments make me happy
• Date: 12/15/2008
• Tags: inferior existence

Now in the earth i cry my sighs
I've out lived many other lives
Flight and path and sky and wind
Water blue mist of yin
Fire rising in the night
Fighting off the steely wind
The new sun rises no need for moon
Might and strength and strength in new
No calm wind in this my breezy life
Nothing seeing me at all
Seeing every other thing
in all of peoples lives
Feeling warm breezes in the spring
Cold water in the fall
The hot sand in summer heat
And cool light in winter freeze
Never set free no peace in life
Staying low in dark fear
Never sleeping never waking
In my prison i stay
Still; for eternity

Comments

[Black Ravenz]

wow,i really like it,its sooo goody!!!! i think yours is better than mine

[Archaic Druid]

very well use of juxtaposition (contrast) in lines 14-15, though this poem seems a bit bland in its theme. Keep up the work though! biggrin

[SoleilMari]

I really like your poem!

[The Lazy Powm]

HEYYY! I SAW YER COMMENT ON ANOTHER POETS POEM! weird! i jest remember really liking yer name hehe

comment on my poems super plz?
happy now?