Dark Sunshine

• Artist: -Hoshiko-Tila
• Description: i wrote this a few years ago when i was going through a tough time with life and im just looking for some feed back from people so i know where i can improve.
• Date: 01/21/2009
• Tags: dark sunshine

My sun has gone away
refusing to shine another day
im stuck in this darkness
without the amazing brightness
anywhere in my life
i might as well grab a knife

I know life isnt fair
but i really just dont care
I know the world is full of sadness
but its also full of madness
maybe i should just hide
but its to late ive already tried

I dont know what to do
i hopee i can just get through
i know i have to be strong
but why does this take so long
i know i can do it
itll just take some time
and after that time
the happyness will be all mine

Comments

[InsertCrayonHere]

i love it, its really good, i am a song writter myself/sing (not famous lol) but i am in my citys quire.....i have won 5tallent shows in my life from singing a song i wrote and i like it... and some times it does lose its rhythm but thats okay!!!

[philelectricguitar]

That's pretty awesome! The only problem I can really find, though, is that during some parts of the song, it loses a little rhythm, because of a few words that could be taken out. Besides that, it's great!