Cut

• Artist: rachel_bella_1996
• Description:
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• Date: 03/12/2009
• Tags: rachel rain pyro pyromaniac icylover

There is a friend who befriended me
Her first words were
"My name is cut With me you can be happy,
With me you won't feel any pain"
I believed her
I took a Knife and I followed the directions
Blood gushed and the crippling pain made me cry out
But cut said "you will be happy now"
"Yes" I agreed "I will be happy now"
I became addicted and I did it every day,
But instead of being happy
I felt horrible"You promised"
I accused sobbing"You said I would be happy"
But she said "But you are happy, in my way"
She chuckled that is when my sister came in
"What are you doing" she screamed
My mom came running up and soon I
Was lying in the hospitle slowly geting
Better but cut came to me once more
Saying"How could you do this? You were happy!
She accused" Why did you disert me?
I was there for you when you needed me"
"No!" I said shaking my head "You diserted me

Comments

[Sicoticfury]

umm... not the best but you could try cutting down the lines a bit... i think it had a good point... you also spelled hospital wrong... hmmm on second thought, have you read E. E. Cummings?

[Cloffing Pempslider]

Not poetry and not funny.

The part about you getting better was disappointing.

[Hikaru1214]

Good.....-_-

[Kawaii_Rainbow_Angel]

Thats a really good poem. I hope all this got sorted out. I loved the ending when it said "'no!' I said shaking my head 'You diserted me'" Its so good.