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When we met,
I made a bet,
that we couldn't last a mounth,
Well it hasn't even been a mouth and you caught me like a butterfly in a net.
- by look_at_that_scene_girl |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/26/2009 |
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- Title: I love you
- Artist: look_at_that_scene_girl
- Description: i was bored and im in love ^-^
- Date: 03/26/2009
- Tags: love
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Konan of the Akatsuki13 - 08/17/2009
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1. there is no 'u' in month
2. very choppy. it has potential, but choppy.
3. try to make it longer. make it 5- line stanzas and add a couple more. turn 'and you cought me...' into another line - Report As Spam
- SilvertongueSagittarius - 04/04/2009
- fail. month doesnt have a "U"
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- BlackMysticalFire - 03/28/2009
- 5/5
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- BlackMysticalFire - 03/28/2009
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Thats cute.
Same here, on the bet thing, yeaaah. It lasted two days.
Good luck. - Report As Spam