Daddy

• Artist: Ubiquitous Androgyny
• Description: Umm well..
  when i was visiting my bff we started talking about her dad and we decided to make the perfect peom about her dad and his is what we came up with.
  i just wanted to put some of my work online so...i hope you like it :whee:
  this isnt the original because i cant fully remember it but the beginning is the same this is what i would call an edited version
  when i get the original i'll post it on here but i like this one
• Date: 03/26/2009
• Tags: daddy devil angel empty lullabye

well here goes nuthin:

There's an Angel on your face
but a Devil in your eyes

Daddy let's go out and play
it's so nice outside

but then out there
you'll trip and fall
and i'll try to help you up

but i'll just fall into your lap
because im just too small

and instead of getting up
you'll just sink below
and you say let's go to the fires
where Daddy can sit on his Devilish throne

and when i look up into the sky
Mommy is singing a lullabye

and then i see
that she wants me
with her Angely ways
with the way her hair waves

i fly up to the sky
while waving goodbye
to my Daddy below
with his dark, empty eyes

Comments

[Ubiquitous Androgyny]

thanks, ive been tryin to figure out what would sound better in that area
it never sounded natural ^^

[Misunae]

Hm yess ish good, but could use some slight changes =D.
Like the part where it says
"but i'll just fall into your lap because im not that strong" Could say "But im just to small" xD Lol I just think that would sound betters o: But yah dont take my opinion my poems on have 4.50 (as the highest) -.-