Black Hole

• Artist: Nyaphlaire
• Description: A poem I wrote about the death of a good friend. Sorry about how bad it is. I wrote it in the middle of class a couple days ago, but never had to guts to let anyone besides a couple friends see it. Constructive critisim please!
• Date: 04/29/2009
• Tags: black hole nyaphlaire

Your star is missing
Your star is gone
I've been looking
I've spent too long

Staring at the sky
Searching for you
You said goodbye
Closed your eyes, too

And then you were gone
My dearest friend
I can't be strong
For there's no end

To my loneliness,
My dying heart
Just emptiness
To take your part

Comments

[athensdarkangel]

four stars...bc it didnt say much of a black hole......

[pink phosphorus]

honestly.......ususally a piece like this would sound pretty cliche to my senses, but this had a really dense meaning to it as well as atmosphere...it may not be the greatest piece of writing that i have ever read, but i can definately respect it.... 3 stars =]