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The dead of night,
the still of air.
On her last breath,
she lets out a squeal.
It's breaks the silence,
and the wind starts to blow.
The world seems to stop
though time flies right on by.
The neighbors are clueless,
the police don't even know.
Her death goes unnoticed
by most everyone.
Her mother stops by,
on her way to work.
She finds her daughters lifeless corpse,
and screams in horror.
The neighbors call the cops,
they don't know what's happened.
The police arrive,
and find mother and daughter,
laying next to each other.
Dead forever.
- by faux_fur_rabbit |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 06/20/2009 |
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- Title: Dead Forever
- Artist: faux_fur_rabbit
- Description: I got the title from the last line.
- Date: 06/20/2009
- Tags: dead forever
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Comments (2 Comments)
- iluvpolkadots - 07/04/2009
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It's good, I think it could be made better by elaborating on the next to last stanza, "The neighbors call the cops/they don't know what's happened". Ya know...making it a tad longer? It's the only one that doesn't...belong. All of your other stanza's are four lines...and it's only two.
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- ThisIsMyDeathbed_x - 06/20/2009
- i likey =) i likey lots. especially the bit about the police not knowing, then knowing, and the neighbours still not really knowing smile
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