sorry for being such an a**

• Artist: mcjagfan
• Description: a ska/punk song
• Date: 07/30/2009
• Tags: sorry being such

What language were you speaking to me when you said good-bye
you wanted a reply from me but it didn't feel right
can we try it again next week
or maybe another time
sorry for being such an a**

That kiss of death you left me with should've changed my mind
You waited for a kiss from me but it didn't feel right
can we try it again next week
next time will be alright
sorry for being such an a**

We went up to your room this time, i threw you on your bed
By the time your shirt came off, the spirit with me was dead
I thought it would work this time
Why does this feel wrong?
sorry for being such an a**


She finally called me out on it, we got into a fight
She said she wanted to hear the truth, and i couldnt lie
theres not gonna be another week
there is no next time
sorry for being such an a**

One day i called your telephone to try and make things right
I thought i would hear your voice but instead it was a guy's
"what the hell do you want with her"
"ill be right over in five"
and then your man beat my a**

Comments

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

first two lines of each verse were great, but then they kinda fizzled out. Make the verses longer, and use a bit more vivid imagery (The first two lines of the first two verses should be your model for the entire song, as they're your strongest lyrics.) Also, if I may be so bold, I think this would word better if it weren't apologetic. Keep the storyline, but pin it all on the girl instead. It'd be catchier and generally easier to relate to. I'll give it a 3 smile Hope you'll check out my stuff too

[Yen_09]

lolz the ending was so the best part!

[ElectraShocked]

I like the ending smile . 5/5 from me!
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[CirceanMadHatter]

the end was a bit weird for me, but i like it. biggrin