Days Under Heaven

• Artist: Agrikar the Hidden
• Description: This is a poem about a boy, who's love dies. Their favorite spot to meet was under an apple tree, and so he visit's it often, in remembrance of his lost love. The final line, "And until you wake, I sleep" conveys that it will be as if he has died until he meets with her in the afterlife. Indeed, this poem's main theme is the comparison between sleep and death. "A Waking Sleep" is a term I've grown fond of, to convey what life and death is synonymously to me.
• Date: 08/28/2009
• Tags: love loss death remorse natriantaffelow

Days Under Heaven
By N.A. Triantaffelow

Twas a warm and wicked morning
The day of Waking Sleep.
We sat under an apple tree
The words she spoke I keep.

And I asked her there,
I did not care,
"Why does it have to be?"
My feelings shown,
My dear had known,
"Why is indeed the key."

Twas a dark and stormy evening
The night of Waking Sleep.
I sat under an apple tree
The words I spoke I keep.

And myself I told,
Tonight was cold,
"But a promise I shall keep."
My dear did go,
From this place I know,
"And until you wake... I sleep."

Comments

[Blood~~fox]

This is nice, almost sweet. It almost reminds me of Sylvia Plath

[Pokaberry]

this is a wonderful piece of work - definitely one of the better ones i've read. i can see you've put alot of thought into it... but i must point out in verse 3, 'evening' throws off the rythem a bit. otherwise, i cant really see any other odd-spots - all in all, a brilliantly constructed work. :3

[F a t a l D e c o d e]

I just love how oxymoronic 'Waking Sleep' is; it really describes the situation well. There is something very heartbreaking about the dialogue too. You really have a knack for closing lines.

[Diosa de Armarrio]

It's very sad. ;_; I liked it quite a bit, though.