Cry

• Artist: x_morphine w a r machine
• Description: Bleh. My friend said I was dead inside so I wrote this.
• Date: 09/03/2009
• Tags: crying

Cry

You told me not t be so weak
You told me never to speak
Of the pain, and keep it all in
Like actually feeling something was a sin

Because of you, I'm scared to cry
So, instead, I just lie and lie
About how vulnerable I feel
Even though it was real

And now, whenever pain rips through my chest
Though I feel so depressed
I do not shed a single tear
Because, deep down, it is your voice I still hear

Comments

[DDrox316]

I love this, it's so sad. I'm sorry about your friend, they don't seem like a real friend sad
Just 2 things I want to say:
1. in the first line "t" needs to be changed to "to"
and 2. I think you should but "of the pain" at the end of the 2nd line, instead of the 3rd line. I feel this flows better... just an opinion!
5/5 (: goodjob

[Reves de Toi]

so tragic and beautifully done! 5/5