Broken Melodies

• Artist: SharpSmiles
• Description: This poem is about a girl's life written as a bunch of songs. One song ruins her life, and everything changes. Unfortunately, songs end.. and so does her life.
  
  I apologize if you're confused or you don't like it. I'm more of a story writer than a poet. I rhymed a lot I know. This idea just came up in my head as rhymes anyway. Just remember, life is already filled with pain, so one piece of pain you can give to someone can sometimes dramatically change their life.
• Date: 11/14/2009
• Tags: broken melodies song life death

A song of love
A gift from above
A song of joy
That can never be destroyed
That's what she thought
Until her love became distraught

She broke down into tears
Eaten by her fears
She locked herself within
A darkness that welcomed her in
She couldn't come out
Not with misery running about
A song of sadness
Of which she begun

A song of darkness
Locked in itself
Oh my God
What is wrong with myself?!
Why does this happen every day?
Why can't it go away?

Madness took over
As she grabbed a knife.
The shining blade
That now depended on her life
She thought she could never win.
As she cut her skin

Her life once was happiness in a song.
No, she thought.
It's all wrong.

I can't take it anymore!
The words, blood written on her bedroom door
Yes, there she lay peacefully
Like a song without melody
Lifeless and dead, on the floor.

Comments

[areyououthere]

yeah, so basically your rhythm is so terrible and your rhymes so boring and predictable that it's best if you don't rhyme at all. start with metaphors and imagery; you'll find it's not just about "expressing your emotions and feelings" and more about symbolism, imagism, and masochism (if you're a poet, you'll be beating your head against the wall often).

[BriiKittie]

i thought it was pretty good! 5/5
add me if u want smile

[Divine Raiden]

I have 2 say that was pretty emo