Rain

• Artist: LuciaVatican
• Description: Just a random sad poem I wrote
• Date: 01/25/2010
• Tags: rain

She cries in the rain
As her tears are swept down the drain
The light does not shine
Where she prepares to dine
Death surrounds her
As she eats her dinner
The time has finally come
for her to go home
Her true home bace
Her true place
Its time for her to say her goodbyes
As tears fill her eyes
And now she slowly starts to die...

Comments

[Samm_Honey]

Agreed with FairyDust..Aids.. 3/5

[FairyDustAids]

I like the idea more than I like some of the lines. Other lines I like a lot. You definatly have potential some of the rhymes were weak but seriously, I like the poem 3/5

[impiousLion]

Aw, that was sad. :[
4/5! :3