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The blood flows leaving u with nothing but cold.
Making u feel alone.Drowning in your tears. alone. tears. fate.
You feel dead to the world. nothing will heal you. nothing
can comfort you. shadows of the demons that u beg to take
you. Blood
Tears
Broken
Demons
Fate
No Sleep
No Comfort
No love
Nothing
..........
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.........
Empty
Silence
Fear
Hate
Tears
You pray that death may come to save u...
You pray that u can one day see the point in life...
You pray that they come back,begging for u...
You pray that there is really someone who can Help....
Tears.....Blood......Cold.......Alone
Dreaming......weeping......praying.......falling apart
Lying there, cold and abandoned.....crying......begging......hoping
Praying for a chance at seeing dawn
Begging for a reason to live
Trying to keep anything whole...
Your heart....Broken
Your dreams.... Shattered
Your faith..... Flattened
Your Mental Beauty.......Gone
Feeling no Regrets
no Remorse
no Questions
no Concern
On the floor.....
Flying
Falling
Bleeding
Deep Breaths
Feeling Pain
Pain
Dying
Pain
Muffled Screams
Dizziness
Eyes Shutting
Body Collapsing
Last Breaths
Finally, You Are In The Hands of Death...
As the bloody knive falls to the floor next
to you, you somehow find yourself saying;
Death is Life & Life is Death but
I have found the perfect place,
Right in Between.
- by lilybloom123 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/11/2010 |
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- Title: Torn Past Two
- Artist: lilybloom123
- Description: I wrote this when my bf broke up with me and we had been going out for a while and he kinda just pulled it out from under me. i hope u enjoy it:) PLZ RATE AND COMMENT!! OH! AND ALSO CHECK OUT MY JURNAL AND TELL PEOPLE ABOUT ME :D READ!!
- Date: 05/11/2010
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Slinkenhofer - 05/06/2012
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Contrary to what everyone else said, it's not all that great. Poetry has a sort of rhythm about it, but half of this poem is short, one-word lines that don't flow. I could understand using it as poetic device to emphasize certain areas, but you use it in most of this poem.
Though I did enjoy the actual stanzas you wrote, they were pretty good. - Report As Spam
- exxxseada - 05/21/2010
- Wow! that was pretty amazing and deep girl! It's really good! That's a totally 5 stars!
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- xXxKnightAngelxXx - 05/16/2010
- wow, your poem is amazing! I know exactly how you fell about the break-up thing, the exact same thing happened to me. really though, great poem, 5stars
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- DareMe2Do - 05/12/2010
- Oh man i love it your really good.
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