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Thoughts infiltrate my dim mind.
Now my eyes pour with satin vanity.
Everything looses color,for now I'm blind.
I show no love; I'm loosing my humanity.
Scratches across the walls,
Ashes scattered on my skin.
I listen to the silent calls
Of voices that demand me of sin.
Sleep causes torment;
With dreams comes hysterical woe.
The pain has me terribly spent
So I'm pale as the winter snow.
My screams never matter.
No one ever hears.
"God don't let me shatter!"
I know he rejects my tears.
I can't remember the little things:
The year, my mother's name.
Memories are cut like strings,
My pride has turned to cold shame.
I've got nothing to do
But sit here and stare at a windowless room;
Pretend I haven't got a clue.
I won't ever leave: this is my god-forsaken tomb.
Swallowed by a ferocious disease
Because life was taken away.
God dismisses my fearful pleas;
I hate living in a world gone grey.
This is what I was meant to be:
Poisoned by thoughts that won't let me free.
Compassion is nothing more but pure profanity,
But it's all I see in this blinding insanity.
- Title: My God-Given Disease
- Artist: Dephy
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Description:
wrote on a whim >.>
i thought it came out alright ^-^
tell me whatcha thing and such lolz
~thankies - Date: 05/25/2010
- Tags: godgiven disease
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Dephy - 06/02/2010
- @ your point of the contradiction....i guess that was me being lazy and not checking it closely..but thanks for your opinion!!!!
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- Dephy - 06/02/2010
- yeah..lol i didnt notice that.KUDOS!!!! :O lol @ your point about the ashed on skin: the poem is about someone losing their mind.theres a quote that i based that off of: "when life feels like hollywood, feeling pain is the only way to really know your alive"....i just kinda switched it around so its more like "when life feels like its fake, feeling pain is the only way to know your alive"..because when your insane apparently you cant distinguish the difference between reality and dreams.
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- Idiosyncratic Quirk - 06/02/2010
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I didn't get what "ashes on my skin" was supposed to mean or if it even mattered. :/ And also, you wrote that there was blindness and later a world gone grey. Kinda contradictory if you can't see.
However, all in all, it's pretty good. You chose a subject that many don't write about: fighting temptation and you bring God into it which is controversial and all the more interesting to read. :3 - Report As Spam