-
Come hither, come hither my dear
As the darkness surrounds your soul
I hold you close as the moon hides behind the clouds
I feel the warmth slip away from you
Come hither, come hither my dear
Under the clouds, with the tears of the gods
our greif fills the night, all shall feel this loss
You cold lifeless eyes fill my soul with dispare
Come hither, come hither, my dear
The raindrops falling become your warm blood, falls to our cheeks
No longer shall I feel the love you once gave me
Farewell, farewell, my dear
- Title: Come Hither
- Artist: Ultima011
- Description: This is the first poem I have ever written. Please tell me how it is.
- Date: 06/17/2010
- Tags: come hither
- Report Post
Comments (2 Comments)
- Mario the Davidic Hero - 06/29/2010
-
keep on writing.... i don't know what else to say about this, but you're off to a good start smile
5 stars ^^ - Report As Spam
- maydaymouse - 06/17/2010
-
It's good, especially for a first time poet! I don't have much critique, sorry! But, you should keep writing, I like this one. 5/5
Rate back please? - Report As Spam