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you fell things
other people can't understand
you teach people the meaning of thing
but when they listen sometimes
they still may not understand
some have a thoughts that great
and some have of something
they don't understand
but in the end they feel things
they can't describe
like love you feel your heart pounding
hate is is something people should not feel
and sad is something few people feel
so when people say they can't feel
there holding there feelings inside
they can't handle what happens
the people who say nothing
there not alive everyone has feelings
so never give up on telling people
your feelings
and never give up on asking them
if there holding it inside rolleyes
- by Cooku123Cooku123 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/02/2010 |
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- Title: feelings are in everyone
- Artist: Cooku123Cooku123
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- Date: 07/02/2010
- Tags: feelings everyone
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Comments (1 Comments)
- onionio - 07/02/2010
- I thought your piece was rather inelegant. It didn’t exactly flow and it wasn’t very poetic. I felt as though you were rambling a bit. Try adding more emotion. And don’t repeat yourself. Also, proof read your work before you submit. There were quite a few spelling and grammatical errors.
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